WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …
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The Au Lait Way (mc ff) (new) by Rikimaru
–2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)–
I’ve said this before, but starting with a negative never pulls me into a story. You don’t have to be positive, upbeat, but starting negatively can put me in the wrong place psychologically, when trying to get into a story. Then there’s a lot of whining, and I barely even got the idea of why this is all happening. As a nitpick, I find it kinda lazy to name a nonfiction business, when all the time and effort was taken to write a work of fiction … Otherwise, this does have distinct polish. Not really my thing, the way it was presented, but it really wasn’t a bad story for what it was.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
Uniforms Control Your Mind (mc ff mf fd in rb ma ds ft) (new) by Mr. Scade
–4.5/5 (very good, all but orgasmic)–
I have to admit, this was quite enjoyable from the start, if only because of how well it was presented. This is one of those authors that can put forward themes I’m not necessarily into, and make them more than readable. Of course, a lot of it actually was to my tastes! That is the nature of anthologies, sketch comedies, etc. You can’t expect the viewer to like everything, but it works as long as it never pushes them away. This was more than fine! Just as an FYI, this works best if you go to the author’s site to see the pics each part is based on.
(ReReadability: high / Follow: yes)
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Super Show (mc mf md gr cb) (new) by Violet Venus
~~2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)~~
Not too badly written, but could’ve used some extra polish. Maybe I’m wrong or maybe its a style of grammar I never saw before, but I’m fairly sure you’re not supposed to put a coma outside the end of quoted dialogue, especially if you already have, say, a question mark already at the end within the quote. Just some constructive criticism! Anyway, nothing particularly grabbed me here in this genre piece, and nothing here for me to mesh with either.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)
RANDOM COMMENTS
Peri Brown (Nicola Bryant) of Doctor Who may actually be the first woman I was truly attracted to, before I even understood what that meant!
The Realms of Mr. Potestas 