WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
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Bimbo Zombies (mc ff) (new) by LincolnAndSunset
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–
Looked different, so I took an interest! Plus, bimbo cheerleaders is not something that would ever turn me away Nice air of mystery through in. As a side note, though, in real life, any loss of a department is incredibly bad news for any university, whether it be bad PR or a sign of crumbling finances. Anyway, on the heat and TF side of things, it was all too quick, and perhaps unnecessarily over the top. In conjunction, the mysterious narrative was too quickly shifted to run zombies everywhere, even if that wasn’t unexpected. It all really took me out of the story. A lot of interesting elements here (certainly definite polish), but the presentation broke it all down for me.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
Rockhoppers (mc mf ff sf) (new) by Tax and Tithe
–2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)–
The title made me think of the B52 song Rock Lobster, but that’s irrelevant! Anyway, I had a bit of trouble with the writing style here. At first, I thought all the stretches of italicized dialogue were internal dialogue. As such, the double quotes seemed not only redundant, but they also made it occasionally difficult to read as internal dialogue. If it wasn’t internal, why was all that dialogue italicized? Made for a difficult read, whether by accident or design. This odd aspect appears to come and go … Regardless, very dialogue heavy. Not saying that’s a bad thing. Its just an observation. Even looking past the oddities, I wasn’t particularly pulled into this. Maybe I wasn’t reading this that deeply, but not much seem to happen. First chapter?
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
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Doorway (mc mf md) (new) by Silver Nerd
~~2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)~~
Doorway to a parallel time? Was there any doubt I would give this a go? Probably could’ve used a little extra polish, as the writing felt a touch stilted and unnatural. Could’ve been less conservative with the comma use, perhaps, but that’s just my opinion. Otherwise written well enough in its own style. Felt rather uninteresting at first, but that probably was intentional, given the plot. Ultimately, the parallel universe theme seemed superfluous, while the story was very slowly paced with no real surprises.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)
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