Jan 4 14 EMCSA Update

WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …

WITHIN
Halloween Costumes (mc mf ex ft gr) (new)  by Pan
–3.5/5 (good, not quite earth shattering)–

Depraved and dirty? Well, err, I do like costume MC! Definitely well polished from the start, albeit nothing particularly vivid at that point. My issue here is that the “sexy/erotic” themed office party seems kind of far fetched to me for a generic office setting. Yes, I have yet to go to a costume office party, but again, even my rather casual workplace probably would never do that. In the story itself, it seemed even more far fetched that the women would go as all out as they did without obvious MC aid. Ultimately, this wasn’t bad, I even got some of the eroticism, but its far fetched nature spoiled it a bit for me.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)

Turn the Page (mc ff) (new)  by Jukebox
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–

Jukebox, is it really you!? Anyway, this is definitely up to the old JB quality, even if it felt rather too slowly paced. Though I was not particularly taken by this piece, this was a fine addition to the Jukebox cannon.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)

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Head Master (masterrobo) (mc mf md ft) (new)  by masterrobo
~~ 1/5 (poor, but she was asking for it with that body, your honor!)

But what if I wanna try it at home as a kind of science experiment? :P Anyway, there were problems sentence one with spelling, while paragraph one fell apart with poor grammar and general rambling. The writing just gets worse from there. A 49 line paragraph’s gotta be some kind of record, though … Our hero just sort of does and did things without clear motivation. Sure, we all had a fantasy with that hot college girl you noticed sunbathing in that yellow bikini, but that’s not necessarily a great story plot or even launchpad in and of itself. However, that’s pretty much this story. The creep sees a hot gal, and fracks the shit out of her with the help of his MC thingy. Why he can’t woo some girl at a bar with mere words and alcohol is left a painful, unnecessary mystery …
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)

RANDOM COMMENTS
It continues to be interesting how I’ll laugh like crazy reading Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy, but still apparently incapable of the same thing reading erotica.

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