WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …
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Dumb Drops (mc ma ex hm) (new) by W. Astor
–1.5/5 (poor +, need to be mesmerized to really like this)–
I must admit, I never thought of using Secret Santa as a backdrop … Anyway, from the start the writing felt a bit stilted and unnatural. Though, it wasn’t bad grammatically, per se. I saw the motivations here, but it seemed a little bit of a stretch to me. Maybe I don’t work in an office environment that much, but I don’t see the major importance of an Office Christmas Party. Also, if the new boss was not happy with the mention of some kind of holiday party, why even tell her? Just pick a house and have some eggnog! I kept thinking of the show The Office here, and I think those denizens dealt with related situations far more logically, ironically. So, yeah, needed further editing, and didn’t work for me.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
Prisoner of Your Own Desire (mc ma) (new) by Mr. Scade
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–
Maybe a bit dark for my tastes, but very well written and unusual. While I liked this overall, I kept wondering what was actually going on. In the way this one was done, that’s not that big a deal, but I was still wondering … 
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
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Education (mc mf md) (new) by The Sympathetic Devil
–2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)–
Not particularly pulled into this but written well enough. Just didn’t work for me, while it’s mostly just sex. Not necessarily a bad story for what it was, though.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)
RANDOM COMMENTS
Though I can’t say I liked them all, it is a great joy to read the efforts of Erotica writers, and I am excited to read whatever comes next in the coming year.
The Realms of Mr. Potestas 