Nov 9 13 EMCSA Update

WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …

WITHIN
Gretchen Switches Teams (mc ff) (new)  by Nick Vegas
–1.5/5 (poor +, need to be mesmerized to really like this)–

Starting paragraph one, I thought this read rather stilted. Plus, for whatever reason, I just don’t buy star athletes looking down on cheerleaders, considering how cheerleaders must be rather athletic themselves. Oh, and cheerleaders are supposed to help energize the team and school … I also had trouble with the use of geography to describe the women here. Seems as much a cheat as it did redundant. Their overall appearance was described. I also had mixed feelings about Eastern Europeans versus Germans. Was this supposed to be a metaphor for something? I just didn’t get it. Seemed possibly racist, if I may present my blunt opinion. Maybe it’s the fact that I live in the “melting pot” of a country America, but specifically describing different high schools via homogeneous lineages seemed alien and artificial to me. As such, the plot did not make that much sense to me beyond common high school rivalries, which aren’t usually as elaborate as fiction often suggests.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)

Pretty Girl (mc ff in ma) (new)  by greasyi
–3.5/5 (good, not quite earth shattering)–

YouView? What could that possibly be based on? :) Anyway, this was nicely polished and read smoothly from the start. Fairly straight forward with no real surprises, but I liked this overall.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)

WITHOUT
Konect (mc mf fd) (new)  by Centurea Montana
~~3/5 (decent, not perfect)~~

Well, YMMV, yourself! Err, whatever that means … Anyway, maybe a little on the silly side, but certainly not overboard on that front. Interesting premise, overall, and done well enough to make this readable.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)

RANDOM COMMENTS
As a side note, I heard a news story recently where students at rival high schools pulled pranks on each other that led to some of those students getting arrested.

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