WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …
WITHIN
Eros Beds (mc mf gr) (new) by Ramaset
–2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)–
Well, OK Ramset Jill on that Author’s Note! Did push a negative button with drama too soon. I mean, boo hoo, expensive water damage … Wait, who are these fictional people? Another thing that struck me is this job search thing. What about the jobs they had already? Accountants can make a hell of a lot of money, while getting a loan or getting a new mortgage didn’t seem to even cross their minds … That aside, even though it kinda breaks down the narrative for me, this was rather predictable and silly. The TF wasn’t half bad, though.
(ReReadability: low / follow: no)
Nylon Agenda (mc mf ff md fd ft) (new) by jman_bigdaddy
–2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)–
Overlooking the enslavement thingy here, even though this doesn’t hold back on that theme. It didn’t seem to present itself as a serious narrative, so that helped. One issue was that I had trouble seeing the point of enslaving all these people. I guess an enslaved person could give them all their money, but wouldn’t somebody notice that was happening? That pretty much broke everything down for me. Skimmed a bit …
(ReReadability: low / Follow: no)
WITHOUT
The Beta State (mc ff mf fd md) (new) by seesaw6
~~3/5 (decent, not perfect)~~
Never read Alpha Beta, and based on the length, I just don’t have the time to … Interestingly written, and made it work, I suppose. Didn’t pull me in as much as it could’ve, in spite of the rebellious themes. Must admit, due to the length, I just didn’t have the time to read this all that deeply. Still, perfectly readable.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)
RANDOM COMMENTS
Totally would’ve gotten these reviews sooner if I didn’t finally figure out how to write the the climactic scene to Further Chronicles of a Cosmic Detective! I was really trying to work that out for a while …
The Realms of Mr. Potestas 