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Freshman Orientation (mc ff) (new) by Have Her Sleep And Obey
–2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)–
This is a fictional story with unrealistic practices? WOW! Anyway, the author did seem to have a point with the latter: this was highly unrealistic. I certainly don’t remember watching boring videos during my freshman orientation! It all seemed like some elaborate fantasy, which in and of itself is not an issue narratively. However, it also seemed rather generic. Sits down, get hypnotized to become a sex slave. It almost seemed like this was setting up for a larger narrative, but that’s clearly not the case. On a side note, I saw no problem with the grammar or spellings as the author was concerned about in the endnote, and I don’t know Spanish very well. This was ultimately a hypno-slave genre piece, which I personally found uninteresting.
(Readability: low / follow: no)
Latter Day Sluts (mc mf md fd ma) (new) by Mudak
–3.5/5 (good, not quite earth shattering)–
Well polished, and interesting from the start. I like object based mind control when its done right. Had mixed feelings about the first sex scene, but I can’t say I was turned off. It was a little dark at first for me. I was kinda disappointed in how the guy acted like a generic guy in that situation: I’ll fuck another woman in front of my wife, and she’ll love it! Luckily, it was done in a way that didn’t detract that much from the story. Plus, even though I am agnostic, messing with those “missionaries” was more than smirk worthy! Maybe this ended on rather extravagant tones, but this was enjoyable.
(Readability: moderate / Follow: no)
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My Boss, the Naga (mc mf fd) (new) by mowgli
~~2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)~~
Minus one or two typos, this first timer gave this noticeable polish. However, there was a brief section where the author decided it unnecessary to use quotes for dialogue. He was obviously trying to simulate an online chat, but it was a little awkward for me. In the end, this is very much a genre piece. Not too much else to it than a guy getting hypnotized. Not all that bad, but it was all fairly straight forward.
(ReReadability: Low / Follow: no)
RANDOM COMMENTS
While I’m not into MM erotica, it is interesting how there don’t seem to be many on the MC Forum into it either.
The Realms of Mr. Potestas 