1/5/013 EMCSA Update

WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …

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Beware the Wrath of a Bimbo Scorned  (mc mf ff md fd) (new) by   Wesley King
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–

Not normally into revenge themes in erotica, but I thought I’d give this a go. Sadly, it’s starts a bit too dark for my tastes. That’s not to say it’s not well written: It definitely gives more than enough motivation for the revenge plot. However, I found the Crystal Heights element to be lacking in any nuance. While I’ve admittedly read very few from this universe, all I ever find, including in this piece, is go to Crystal Heights and become a bimbo. Get’s kinda redundant. Anyway, not my kind of story, but overall a well written one, nonetheless.
(Readability: low / follow: no)

Test Room 1408  (mc mf md ma) (new) by   Wesley King
–3.5/5 (good, not quite earth shattering)–

Rather straight forward and predictable, but that’s how it is designed. Overall, it was written well enough, in spire some bumps here and there that could have been cleaned up with an extra edit. Maybe a bit cheesy right at the end, but this was enjoyable.
(Readability: low / Follow: no)

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Mid-Coitus (mc mf md) (new) by   SpaceSamurai
~~1.5/5 (poor +, need to be mesmerized to really like this)~~

Wow, “absolute work of fiction”? Is that apposed to a speculative work of fiction? Anyway, the first paragraph is more than arguably one long run-on sentence for this first-timer, and that is sadly an instant turn off in all ways. Plus, many of the sentences are structured poorly causing ramble, while the constant use of “Uhn” rather than “Uhh” or “Err” was rather unusual to me (a nitpick). Rather whiny, too … Definitely plenty of effort here, I suppose, but the room for improvement overwhelms the effort.