WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …
WITHIN
Slide (mc ff ma) (new) by Sara H
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–
Definitely well written and polished. Though, it does seem to be written in a way that assumes automatic interest in what they are discussing. For whatever reason, I was a bit disinterested, if only because “God Wave” and “dampening fields” aren’t necessarily new concepts. While chatty isn’t as big a deal as it used to be for me, the first part could have maybe been compressed a bit. Seeing God Wave and dampening field in the context of erotica tells me more than enough! Second part is far better. Not particularly fresh, but not bad overall.
(Readability: low / follow: no)
So Track 8 (mc mf fd) (new) by Lillywashere
–3/5 (decent, not perfect)–
Though the themes are not on top of my list in terms of arousal and, in some cases, interest, this was well polished. Though, everything was fairly obvious the moment his mind “wondered.” Very straight forward, but not bad.
(Readability: low / Follow: no)
WITHOUT
Krampusnacht (mc mf md ds) (new) by MyndHold
~~2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)~~
I never would have known this was a work if fiction! Also, I’m not sure if I could mentally qualify as being an adult 
Anyway, it showed general polish, while just about every number I saw should have been spelled out in my opinion. There were other blatant formatting issues, too, which is probably a debate for elsewhere. While definitely not cliched, this was not as fresh at it wanted to be. It was definitely as dark as it wanted to be, though! However, I found the Krampus to be a bit disappointing and two dimensional in its purpose: mostly just finding people to punish for their wrong doings. Though, a punishing Santa is an interesting concept narratively, and the show Futurama actually has that character through Robot Santa. One small nitpick here is how “Krampus” was a bit too close to “cramps” in my head; it’s not unlike how “lycan” (lycanthrope) sounded a bit too much like “lickin” in Underworld. Thank the gods Lost Girl uses lycanthrope or simply wolf! Anyway, if this was reedited with trimmed fat and improved formatting, than this could be an amazing horror fantasy.
(ReReadability: low / Follow: no)
RANDOM COMMENTS
Dom/sub themes can arouse me provided it’s somewhere along the lines of light hearted fun or one time experimentation.
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