EMCSA Update 11/11/12

WITHIN: Graded primarily on heat and narrative
WITHOUT: Graded primarily on narrative
Possible spoilers below …

WITHIN
Erotic Transference  (mc ff) (new) by   Mr. J.
–2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)–

This author has a strange obsession with copy/pasting his “bio” at the top of all his stories. To be diplomatic, I’m not sure how strong my general interest is to that in many circumstances … Anyway, perhaps I’m just in a “mood,” but I found myself not liking this author’s writing style. Don’t get me wrong “show not tell” is important; though, as Freud liked to say, sometimes a hammer is just a hammer. I don’t always care that much about what’s her name crossing and uncrossing her feet. It’s like the author’s trying too hard to invoke common images, and creating fluff as a result. In the end, too predictable and familiar for me to ultimately mesh with this.
(ReReadability: low / Follow: no)

Sexcafades  (mc mf md gr) (new) by   miketheFable
–2/5 (so-so, maybe a good story to others but didn’t mesmerize me)–

Though I don’t mind forth wall breaking, I find that it can trail a fine line between great and ridiculous. A nitpick bordering on the negative is the almost ridiculous amount of questions! There are whole paragraphs that are just one question mark after another without getting to any answers expediently. I know a professor whose head would explode reading that! Though it won’t make my head explode, all the questioning in this story did get tiresome. In the end, I just couldn’t identify with this EMCSA author construct. I write erotica as a hobby, while never receiving any monetary gain. So, I don’t care that I have no erotic story ideas past my finite Passions Multiverse at the moment; I didn’t get frustrated after I didn’t know where to go after my Breath of Power series. I can’t say this crossed the line into ridiculousness, but I can’t say this crossed into my mesh either.
(Readability: low / Follow: no)

WITHOUT
Adelaide’s Toy (mc mf fd) (new) by   adelaidestoy
~~2.5/5 (not great, had some redeeming qualities)~~

First time author, here we go! I had mixed feelings about the start. Just odd and bordering on the ridiculous, I thought. That forced, controlled theme anthropomorphized via Adelaide continues for good or ill. It sometimes gives the narrative a kind of split personality, which I’m not sure I liked very much in this case. Interesting in its own right, but not completely my thing.
(ReReadability: low / Follow: no)

RANDOM COMMENTS
It’s interesting to look down the shirt of your boss unintentionally, especially if she is kinda sexy…